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In the royal palace, the king of Aurng was talking with his royal advisor in the affairs of his
kingdom. They walked down one of the long halls as usual, guards at their backs and
empty of anyone else when an explosion happened under their feet and sent them flying
backwards.
The guards were the only ones that stirred; the king and his advisor were dead. Blood
streamed from their ragged carcasses and gathered into a pool once the carpet couldn’t
absorb anymore of it. It looked like water against the original cherry red of the carpet.
***
The bell rang from a brick school building in the middle of an open field for all the
residents of the town to hear, hear that the children were coming home. It was about
three in the afternoon and the children flooded out of the school to enjoy the last of the
sunlight.
But one boy was in a hurry to go home. Today was the day he got letters back from his
family. After three weeks of waiting, he would finally hear more about his other brothers
and sisters from far away and more about how his father’s work was going.
His father was a very important man and as such, could afford such a large family. The
reason they didn’t live all together was because most of his older siblings were trying to
make their own way in life and those that weren’t were living in the house their mother
had lived in before she died.
He was the youngest child of the third wife, making him the youngest of all his siblings.
His father had bad luck with women for the only reason he would remarry would be when
his last wife died, after about ten years or so after marriage. The boy admired his father
for this quality. He thought he was pretty faithful.
The mail had come at noon so the boy ran past the mailbox and went straight into the
house. There they were, on the table, all twenty-five of them. He picked them up and
rushed to his room. He resisted opening them until he became comfortable on his bed
and lighted a candle for when the light from his window faded.
He opened the first one his hand found and opened it. From the handwriting, he could tell
it was his older sister Leiant, the second oldest of the first wife. She was very beautiful,
like her mother whom the boy had seen in pictures, but she was very strict. She had two
sons older than him and always mentioned them in her letters. This time, the letter talked
about Jerian, her eldest, and Tellar, her other son, going to archery practice and
impressing their teacher with how well they could shoot on horseback. The boy didn’t
mind as much that the letter was all about his nephews but when he had met them in
person, he found them to be full of themselves and wondered if it was because their
mother bragged about them constantly.
A knock came at the doorway. The boy’s full-blood older brother was leaning on the
doorframe.
“Hey.”
“Hi.” He handed the letter to him as he came in. “It’s from Leiant.”
A look of distaste appeared on his brother’s face but he took it from him anyway.
“I don’t like her very much,” he said.
“Why not?” the boy asked, puzzled.
“Well, she’s like all the other siblings: pompous because she’s older and her mother
came before ours,” his brother responded with scorn.
His brother was only three years older than him but their tastes seemed decades apart.
The boy liked all of his older siblings to an extent and was polite to them but his brother
was the exact opposite, only liking and confiding in his little brother.
He continued. “I don’t know why you write to them. They don’t like us.”
It was like they were in pods, imprisoned by the distance between them and their other
siblings. The boy broke free from that pod with his open heart.
But that wasn’t why his siblings wrote to him. They always said that in his letters he
sounded energetic and out-going but in person he was shy and reserved, making him
interesting. What they didn’t know was that in person, the boy feared them but in letters
he could be himself.
“They are not so bad,” he said, suddenly very shy.
His brother shrugged, “If you say so,” and left the room. The boy plucked a new letter out
of the pile.
This one was from his father. The envelope was creamier than the others and it always
had the smell of freshly baked piecrusts to it. His father always smelled like that every
time he visited, even though he didn’t eat any. It was another thing the boy liked about his
father.
When he opened it, something fell out of the folds of the letter and fell to the floor. He
picked it up and inspected it. It was an urgent letter from the palace, with the official wax
on the folds of the envelope. Letters from the palace were never a good thing. He opened
it in a panic and almost dropped it. While reading, he exchanged looks at his father’s
letter, as if it was evidence against the letter in hands.
Upon finishing the last word, he got up and ran to the kitchen.
“MOM!”
- Title: KDCAC prologue
- Artist: KikuMizu
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Title: Kisses Don't Count As Candy. I thought that the title would bring unwanted attention (and I was embarrassed) so I put it here. I want comments, I always do, and, well, this is sort of a romance but it's not like that at first. In fact, if you like people dying, the beginning of the prologue is for you and there will be more later. For those that don't, most of he deaths happen towards the end...I think.
Oh, and you'll find out about the namesake later. - Date: 01/28/2010
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Comments (7 Comments)
- Yoshi-Youichi - 05/14/2010
- I like the title-you should advertise it rather than abridging it! You'll be surprised at the amount of publicity a good title and description get!
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- Lraihly - 04/30/2010
- It was hard for me to get into the story at first. But it got better and better, and then I realized I had read all of it!(and was craving for more). I think the thing for you to think about would be the commas. You didn't use almost any at first, but by the end, was using them alot. And it was the end that sucked me into the story! ^^ I know there are people who get bugged by others who say stuff like this, but I think it's just as important to have good spelling(or create your own style :] )
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- Outcast-ghosT - 02/14/2010
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ok...it's supposed to be a prologue, from what? xP
the only thing I?m a bit confused is by the fact that it seems that the boys father is royalty, thus everybody in the family is.
And how much blood do you need to fill up a carpet? Too much..xD
But, other than that, it's very good cuz the end leave you intrigued, wanting to keep on reading, reafirmed by the fact that nothing's still clear...
Good stuff... =)
keep it up! wink - Report As Spam
- KikuMizu - 02/07/2010
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Whee~ I love comments smile
(Critisim is welcome too) - Report As Spam
- UnwantedSurrender - 02/06/2010
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I like it. c: I love the story line. haha. I haven't gotten around to finishing the other one because I realized that I forgot most of it due to the fact that I haven't read it in forever. *sigh* But I will get around to it. c: I really like your writing. Keep up the good work!
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- KikuMizu - 01/31/2010
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HA HA HA! thank you~ heart
I think of unusual things quite often.
I got to get working on Marriage though...I've been taking a break from writing to study for an exam coming up but I will be blown after that so I will have time after that. - Report As Spam
- curriesauce - 01/31/2010
- okay, i read the rest of the chapters about marriage, they r good, waiting for u too post the rest. U have very unusal but interesting plots! ^^ I like this prologue as well.
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