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I woke to a dark screaming. I knew what it was but coundn't help. The rie's have found a new victom. The Rie are winged creature's that feast on human flesh. The prefure woman.
My name is Caraina Jonasin. I am the daughter or a Riefighter that was killed saving my life. He didn't have to die. He could have left me to die in the Rie's nest.
But that is a discusting story, so I will tell what is happening right now.
My Story
I walked down the lane to the school house. My mind was fuming. The sexist cowards! The school teacher Monseir Rose was teaching us about the Riefighters when I raised my hand and told him my father had been a fighter. He told me that I need to hold my tongue, and right after that another boy named Jordan yelled out that he wanted to be a fighter. When I said that I wanted too, Monseir ROse told me only the best out of the best can be Riefighters, and especially not girls. How DARE he.
Well I am going to show them I will live up my fathers reputation. Only two weeks from the day i was insulted, Monseur Gabriel took me aside in class and told me "Coraina, your fathers will has beeen found. you are to be taken to a village near Markson. you will continue your education there."
i just nodded Markson was where my father and his father went to school. he must have wanted me to continue the tradition.
I was taken to the orphanage i was raised in to gather my things. then i was shoved into the back of a caravan. the long road to Markson was treacherous. we would cross the River Maeala and the Fanwell Mountains. snow started on the second day of our journey. ice crept its way into all of our beds. every few hours we would stop to releive ourselves and to eat.
one night i was shaken awake. "Caraina! wake, now Caraina! we must leave, the Rie are coming, Caraina!" and that was the first adventure i was to expirience on my journey to Markson.
- by Edwards_Lovergirl |
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- | Submitted on 08/23/2008 |
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- Title: Darkness
- Artist: Edwards_Lovergirl
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if u like this give me a comment and i will write more
This is a story about a girl that has to live down her father's bloody past. - Date: 08/23/2008
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Comments (5 Comments)
- s i l e n t sunbeam - 01/14/2009
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spellcheck is your friend...
again, it's too short. D: - Report As Spam
- pu3 dayana - 12/13/2008
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short but simply good
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- _lullabyscradle_ - 10/18/2008
- i like it. it....has a feeling that draws you to it....
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- bluebird94 - 10/18/2008
- thanx for ur comment! ur story seem interestin but u also seem kind of ameutur. work on the flow, keep things smooth. if you dont know how to spell a word, look it up. dont pause a story to point out its flaws. o, and change the name of the teacher! My name is gabrielle and i am not a mean sexist teacher! lol (u dont rlly hav 2)
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- Xithia - 08/23/2008
- It's a bit short, but so far, it's good. It sounds interesting.
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