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Rosie, was in town buying some groceries for her mum. She breathed in the cool morning air. Old tudor houses stood high in the clouds, Doldrum was a little town. Barely a town at all and not many people lived there but Rosie didn't mind. Stepping into the butchers, she looked around at the diffrent meats. A smell of raw meat spreading up her nose. "Excuse me"
"What do you want, duck?" The butcher replied
"Six sausages please?"
"Certainly sugar, here you go" He handed over a bag of sausages, Rosie gave him the money.
"Thanks sir" Rosie shouted as she skipped out the door cheerily.
As she walked along the cobble street, shadows were seeming to creep towards her.
"Don't be stupid" She wispered to herself. Turning into an alley, she shivered chillingly. Then she saw his face, glaring maliciously into her eyes. She glared back. She turned and ran, as she possibly could run. Racing past shop windows his face still lingered there, fixed in motion with her. Crashing into her house, dropping the sausages she ran to her bed. Split second late his face came peering through the open window. Blood red skin, he smirked a black liquid swirling inside his mouth. Chuckling and still staring pain seared her eyes. She tried to scream but nothing came out. His thin body leant right through the window, bones jutted out in odd places, yellow talons grabbed Rosie. He punched her head, she went limp, knocked out.
Hours later she woke, in a dungeon or fortress of some kind. Blood had dried on her head, some crumbled off. It was mostly dark, bar two low burning candles. Scuttling bugs were all over her, she was tied tightly to a wall. Heavy metal chains hung from locks. She saw talon marks deep in her leg. They were very sore and still sticky from blood.
Not long after, she hear Relentless creeping towards her cell, long scrapes getting louder and lounder until he appeared in the doorway. "What's your name?" Relentless hissed.
"R-R-Rosie" Shivering uncontrollably.
"Good girl, I am Relentless, your here to die." He hissed evily again.
Rosie remained quiet. Relentless came further towards her, stroking her cheek roughly. "What's the matter, you seem terrified?"
"What do you expect, I'm going to die!" Rosie squeaked.
"Haha, very well then, Rosie my dear"
He drew out his longest yellow talon and slashes her face, blood poured out. She screamed and tears rolled down her face. Relentless laughed, and got out a blade. Her eyes widened with fear. The blade showed signs of many crimes before, jagged edges, blood stains.
Parading around the cell, then getting closer to rosie, a smile crawled across her face. Eyes darkening, mood falling, an arm missing. Relentless was holding it. He chewed it gratefully, Rosie just hung there artries bleeding profuseley. Blood was squirting out with every breath she took. Her arm was seathered badly, viens were hanging out. The pain was incredible and never ending. Relentless spluttered, then dived for her legs. Tearing them into pieces, every tendon ripping, bone breaking, screams echoing and now she was legless. She knew her life was to end, so she screamed and screamed until her throat was sore. Relentless smiled. "Now it is time"
He got the blade a scored across the throat.
Relentless dragged her body and threw it's remains into black bubbling sour goo. It bubbled fiercly and her arm only just stuck out. She lay motionless with a deep incision in her throat.
Rosie's parents had contacted the police when they found her not to be there. Police were busying around trying to find her. Peter knew were to look. Peter was a secret hunter of Demons, he loved to tease and taunt them. He also knew this was one of Relentless's jobs. Hands delved into pockets off to his lair - again.
He stood infront of the black goo, tendrils lashing out at him but he dodged every one perfectly. "Relentless!" He shouted.
Peter was a weak boy, he just teased Demons, never fought one. Ever. "You her again you foolish boy" Relentless hissed.
"Foolish I think not!"
"Go away, it is too late. Pipsqueak"
"Well you killed my friend, a dear one to my heart. Now you will pay you evil minded lump of red s**t!"
"You dare to call me that!" Relentless hissed loudly.
Relentless went forward to attack Peter, Peter's foot slipped into the black goo. Some of the burning liquid bit it's way up his leg. Giving him something...
There was a roar of pain from Relentless, black tendrils now surrounding Peter...
What had Peter done?....
Relentless slithered out of sight, Peter ran away. Tendrils settling down. Rosie sat up in a bath of black bubbling goo, which was boiling hot. Pale as the dead. She shrieked "Peter, you IDIOT"
Laughing loudly. Her wavy brown hait spreading into black. She grinned meaningfully. "Hahahahahahah"
- by Sand-Ninja-Smurf |
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- | Submitted on 09/01/2008 |
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- Title: Relentless Beginning
- Artist: Sand-Ninja-Smurf
- Description: I wrote this when I was 12. I updated since XD. It's about a demon called Relentless. He see's a girl called Rosie. Then a little torture here and there. Then peter. =D
- Date: 09/01/2008
- Tags: relentless beginning
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Comments (7 Comments)
- XxInnocent-FearxX - 03/26/2009
- Nasxig said it all...5 stars though on making me feel weak...
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- StarberrySquid - 09/01/2008
- I award you no points, and may God have mercy on your soul. 3=
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- Sand-Ninja-Smurf - 09/01/2008
- That's next. I'm currently writing that one.
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- X-Suicidal-Sweets-X - 09/01/2008
- What happened to peter??
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- Sand-Ninja-Smurf - 09/01/2008
- Thanks. Yeah I wrote it two years ago and haven't touched it since. I likes creppyness XD
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- Carpathyah - 09/01/2008
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Wow, that was so creepy o.o
There were some minor errors but nothing major to throw-off the story.
Great story, though =D - Report As Spam