- I went outside to walk around my new palace of wonders only to find a little girl standing there staring at me. "Hello!" I said with a smile. "Hello." she said back. "My name is Eliza, whats yours?" I took out my hand nicely to give a shake. "Jensly." she said back shaking my hand. "As you can tell I just moved here!" I was so happy to finally meet somebody who very normal. "Mommy told me to come over and give you some flowers only I dropped them on the way here." She said sadly. "OH! It's ok your vist is just as nice! Where did you drop them? Mabye we can go look for them together!" I said with a smile. "That would be very nice!" She smiled to me. We skipped away to find the flowers that she dropped. We walked to the woods where she claimed she dropped them. "I live just on the other side of the woods and right about the middle is where i dropped them." Jensly sadly said. "Well i love adventures!" I smiled and we walked away. "I bet your mother will be looking for you soon we should hurry and go as fast as we can!" She said happily. " I agree! But one thing I would like to know is how big are these woods?" I asked softly but loud enough that she could here. "Oh! big enough...to tell you the truth i live about the middle of the woods..." She look down at her toes and started cring. "What's wrong Jensly?" i asked only to find that her tears turned into blood spraing out of her eyes. I threw back in terror. I started to screm but she was to fast. She took a knife to my throut and threatned me. " SHUT UP OR ILL KILL YOU AND ALL YOUR FAMILY AND FRIENDS!!!" She yelled. "Then you will kill youself!" I said with the last breath i had. The knife dropped. She ran away so fast i could bear it. My throut started bleeding. I could not breath so well, it was getting dark. I ran home blood all over me. My time going away faster than i hoped. My mother opened the door only to find me bleeding to death. She called 911 as fast as she could and they arrived as soon as they could. When I woke up I was in the hospital. Around my neak was a bandage holding the blood inside so I wont die. I was hurt very hurt but fine all in all. I never found out what happened or how but all I know is that I will never fall for that trick again...evan though I have been asked many times after that. When that happens the scar on neak begens to bleed. When it does my mother and father pack up and we leave.
- by Save the world stopmypain |
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- | Submitted on 10/04/2008 |
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- Title: The Child
- Artist: Save the world stopmypain
- Description: A girl a girl. A girl and people. A girl tricking people. People die. Stupid kid...
- Date: 10/04/2008
- Tags: last standing
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Comments (6 Comments)
- kirabbit - 12/24/2009
- decent story, but yes, watch the spelling and paragraphing would be good as well. Descriptions could also be lengthened and go into more detail. For example, instead of "it was getting dark" it could be "the world as I saw it faded to blackness". These are just suggestions/constructive criticism, don't take it personally, k?
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- Save the world stopmypain - 07/08/2009
- i can spell i jst didnt do a really good job bcuz i was typing fast bcuz the toughts jst came into my mind really fast and i will put paragraphs in =]
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- Elousia - 05/05/2009
- Pretty good story but you should really put it in paragraph form. It would be waay easier to read.
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- lidstir - 10/12/2008
- uh bad, its great emotions an all but you need to learn how to spell.
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- BigBoyDemon95 - 10/12/2008
- wow cool i love that its so cool... i said that sorry lol
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- 13th Mistress of Death - 10/05/2008
- sweet story sista! very scary though scarah! srry i just had to try that out i know u dont like ppl callin u scarah! but creepy story!!!
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