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how could this happen. she wrote in her dairy. ive been a mermaid my whole life but i couldn't transform last night. she keeps writing though the night .
Kat get out here right now and take care of this kitten . her mother yells from a room in the house far from Kats room. Great. kat mumbles to herselfas she walks to the her little kitten.
hi brat. kats little cousin laya yells exept none adults in the house but she dosnt notice Kat has her mp3. cant wait tell this stupied little brat leaves. kats says in her mind. but i have to play with her or i can get her on a game on the computer.
WHAT. kat yells acrossed the house. its just for a few months she will go back home when her moms feeling better. kats mother says trying to get kat to calm down. Im not sharing a room with her. its my room and i dont want princess stuff in my room. kat replys . she isnt staying in your room shes staying in the geust room kats mother replys in a firm sound. now no more arguing.
hi cousi. laya says as she gets all of here dump princess stuff out of her mothers car. let me show you to your room. kat says as she grabs some bags.when they get to the geust room kat throws the bags on the bed. be careful with those they have my favorite princess dress up clothes in them . whatever. kat says then she leaves the room and heads to her room
- by torn_between_two_worlds |
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- | Submitted on 11/30/2008 |
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- Title: tried but failed
- Artist: torn_between_two_worlds
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Description:
its about a girl who tryed to turn into what she really is .......... a mermaid but failed. and she gose though alot like her brattey little cousin laya moving in and getting a kitten thats a troble maker
second one i will write on december 20 - Date: 11/30/2008
- Tags: tried failed
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Comments (2 Comments)
- Missbunniswan - 11/30/2008
- Ok, I like your writing. But you need to put quotations in there so people will know when someone's talking. Also keep every thing either present tense,or past tense. Don't switch around that also gets confusing. Add periods when nessecary, capitalize first words of sentences, and names, and try adding more detail. This has awesome potential! Keep up the good work!
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- torn_between_two_worlds - 11/30/2008
- the second part is when she finds out what happend
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