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WRRRRSH! The sound of a shower faucet being turned on echoed
throughout the hallway of a three-story plantation-style mansion.
"Aaah," a fourteen-year-old girl sighed as she entered the steaming
shower. "Just what I needed, a nice, warm, relaxing shower and-Yeeeah!
Cold!" she screeched as the warm water suddenly turned ice
cold. "William! Jacob! You are SO dead!" The girl jumped out of the
shower and threw on her robe, her sopping wet bronwn-with-golden-bangs
hair flowing out behind her as she ran down the hallway. She grabbed
and ancient spear of the wall as she neared the area where her two
younger brothers were inching away from the hot water heater. " Get
back here, you little twerps!" the girl yelled as she charged down the
hallway after them.
"Ha ha! You should see the look on your face!" one of the brothers
laughed, looking back at her. "Yikes!" he cried as his sister jabbed
her spear at him.
"What's the matter, Jake, you scared?" she smirked. "Don't tell me
you can't handle my spear!" At that point, the siblings reached the
end of the hallway.
" Uh oh!" Jake cried as they were backed up to the wall.
"Eh heh heh, can't we talk this out?" his twin brother said as he
barely ducked the spear.
"Well, Will, it's been nice knowing you," Jake sighed as he shook
hands with Will. "Just remember all the good pranks we pulled. Sorry
it had to end so soon."
"Ok, are you done with your last words yet so I can kill you?"
their sister asked, butting in. "You are? Good. Then here's for all
those pranks you pulled-"
"Amber! What are you doing with that spear?" their mom asked as she
walked in to see the girl inches away from running her brothers
through.
" Oh, er, nothing, mom!" Amber said as she hastily hid the spear
behind her back. "We were just trying to play a...er...game! Yeah, we
were playing a game!"
"Uh huh, sure, we were playing kill the younger brothers," Jake
replied.
"Amber, what have I told you about killing your brothers?" Amber's
mom asked.
"But mom! They screwed up my shower again! That's the fifth time
this week!" Amber complained. "Besides, I was following the rules. i
wasn't going to kill them. Maybe cut off an arm or leg, rip out their
spleen, {Anyone remember Ms. Wratchford?XD} but not kill them."
"Sorry, no disembowling family members," her mother replied. "It's
too hard to get blood out of the carpet."
"Aw, man! Oh well, i guess..." Amber sighed. "I'll get you next
time, you little twerps!" she hissed at her brothers.
"Anyway, don't you think yu should finish your shower?" her mother
asked. "The water should have warmed up by now. Besides, your robe's
coming untied."
"Oh, right! I'll go do that!" Amber cried, embarrased. Then she went back
upstairs, after a normal Sunday morning.
- Title: First Chapter
- Artist: Emmiiiii
- Description: I don't really have a name for this story, it's one I started a while back but never finished, maybe if enough people like it I'll keep going...btw I also posted this on a site called keepersoftheelements.webs.com, check it out if you get a chance! By the way, the rest of the story does get better, I promise!
- Date: 03/18/2009
- Tags: chapterone magic
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Comments (2 Comments)
- bindyblueeyes - 07/16/2009
- i actually like it but its too far into the story for the first chapter
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- Arden Snow - 03/27/2009
- Starting with an onomatopoeia is a bit overrated. I'd also try to avoid all the slang.
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