The Drowning Man

• Artist: The Unnamed Sin
• Description: Just a little thing I created during bowling...
• Date: 04/07/2009
• Tags: drowning

I couldn't breathe. I was drowning. I could see nothing but blackness. I could feel my life ebbing as I sank in the icy water. My muscles were all frozen... I couldn't move. My pulse throbbed in my ears, painfully loud. My lungs burned, pressure was crushing my skull. I wanted to scream, throw away my air and die. But my jaw was too frozen to move. The thin chain that bound my wrists cut into my skin painfully, nearly breaking skin. A rope bound my ankles, and weighted with a rock. I couldn't breathe. I was dying...

(A/N: Random? Of course. Depressing? Possibly. I just came up with this at bowling. Amazing, I know...I always get story thoughts at the bowling alley, though...)

Comments

[Vampire-Demon Blood]

I think it ios marvalous... for a bowling alley story razz
Maybe when your older you couyld become a famous writer... becopme rich.... buy your own bowling all, and just sit there when you wanna create a story biggrin

Anyway, i like it. And a better sentence for the comment underneath is:
"However, my jaw is frozen, and i'm unable to move it"

[XxXxhana-chanxXxX]

i like it too but u can fix the words a lil just tweak them so they fit.. X3 im not makin sense am i? ..
well im tryin to say ..like how you said "but my jaw was to frozen to move"
u should try "but my jaw was felt so frozen it couldnt move"

or sumthin idk.. jes tryin to make it better X3
but i like it tho very nice..^^

[EclecticDrops]

nice description. I like it. =D