The Looking Glass

• Artist: Tah Smexy Bunneh
• Description: This is something I wrote cause i was bored, plz leave questions and comments, and yes this was from my journal entry. if its a good start then ill continue it.
• Date: 05/25/2009
• Tags: looking glass

Crunch,crunch the grass goes as Rin, a Teardrop elf, runs as her life depends on in. Faster and faster Rin ran holding a bag with her life in it. The bag contained the Golden Teardrop, a magical ring that only the alimighty Teardrop leader can wear, it is as powerful as it is valuable. Behind her were Fire elves who are trying to steal the ring back, but for what reason? Rin suddenly stops because the next thing she knows, she's standing over a cliff.(rocks fall as she looks down towards the drop and forest under her feet.)
" You have no where to run now, Rin. Hand over the bag so there won't be anymore trouble." The leader of the Fire elves said as they came to a halt.
" You'll never be able to take this ring away form me as long as I live. And if I don't hand it over, what you do......hurt me. Follow if you want this ring so much." Rin said looking twice at the cliff.
Without giving in a second thought she jumped pumenting downward hundreds of miles toward the dense forests underneath.

Comments

[FunkieSpunke]

It was a little confusing during the story but I can still see what you're trying to write. I like how the story plot of this story, i like magic. The grammar made it confusing though. I read your journal too. That one was okay too. You skipped some parts of the questions which made me stop and reread it again. But it was definitely good. Creative too.

[Tah Smexy Bunneh]

If any one comes and reads this it continues at my profile in the journals