- One cloudy day, in the middle of Autumn, a girl named Lillian was sitting alone. She stroked the grass with her hand, very slowly. A breeze passed by, along with a whisper. "Lillian, you have come..." The whisper said as it passed by her. Suddenly, a dark angel appeared. "Lillian, I can set you free. You will no longer be lonely." The spirit in a whisper. "How do you know how lonely I am?" Lillian said tears welling up. "Yes, the sight of your friends death was shocking for you. I am Luna, I can set your miserable soul free..." Luna said faithfully. "You will, will I be with Eva?" Lillian asked hopefully. "Yes, in peaceful place as well..." Luna promised. "Then--yes!" Lillian said determined. "Think of all the miserable thoughts first..." Luna inquired. Lillian thought about her house burning down, the death of her family and her only friend who saved her life. "Now I shall reach and take your soul. You will become a light and ascend to heaven." Luna promised. "Thank you soul keeper, you helped me a lot." Lillian said with one last tear. "I always will..." After she dissolved the soul, Lillian's light shot up to heaven. As for Luna, she turned into mist and faded with the breeze.
- by skittlezofdoom |
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- | Submitted on 07/09/2009 |
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- Title: The Soul Keeper
- Artist: skittlezofdoom
- Description: A spirit who helps all miserable souls...
- Date: 07/09/2009
- Tags: soul keeper
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Comments (6 Comments)
- ElectraShocked - 08/19/2009
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It's good, kind of short to have that much depth, but its ok. Add on to it maybe?
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- raniel25 - 07/16/2009
- best
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- GopherNugget - 07/12/2009
- wat can i say?u got talent
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- Lotus_BIade - 07/12/2009
- not bad. :]
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- Kate will BRB - 07/11/2009
- Eh, not too bad. Writing and such-like is fine. I'm not really into really short stuff, but as it is it's an OK short-short story.
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- Xx-Pumkin king-xX - 07/09/2009
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cool......
ever think of publishing it and all sorts of stories like it?????
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