Jay, A Sad Story. Preview

• Artist: Aimozz
• Description: If you like this and want me to make a story out of it, leave me a comment.
• Date: 07/31/2009
• Tags: death story

Jay lay on his stomach as he paddled along the water slowly. A big wave was coming up. He knew he would nail it this time. As soon as the wave was close, he realised it was a rip.
"Crap, some one help me !" sweatdrop Jay screamed.
The next hour was blurry for Jay.

Comments

[Purple-shoes616]

The first commenter is right
cant really get a good feel for a piece with less than a paragraph. Also if you want any piece of writing you ever do to be taken seriously NO EMOTICONS

[GopherNugget]

sounds good...BUT!! evn wen u write a preview u NEED to write more...im a writer too nd i can understand...but others will read this nd think "wtf...is that all" so ya