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A gaunt expression covers her face as a tear rolls down her cheek; She stands above the world watching those below. Her skin pale, her eyes bloodshot from the of those weeks of sleepless nights that had tormented her so, she can think of only one thing --- how to end her suffering.
Cassie looks downward, then closes her eyes. She thinks for a moment, and as it passes only the thoughts of her love for James swell in her mind. How he, as the others had as well, abandoned her at the time she needed them the most, leaving her to those many restless nights upon her bedroom floor inundated with tears that refused to stop flowing.
She hears a sound approaching from behind, distant at first; not looking back, she stares only in front of her, into the abyss below.
"Cassie no! Please... "
It was Alexia, her only friend in the world, who had forsaken her but one month earlier, leaving her behind --- like everyone else. The desperate call from behind shakes Cassie's resolve for a second. She wavers --- then, in the moment that would change Alexia's life forever, she speaks one last time.
"Forgive me..."
"No... Cassie... Cassie!"
Moments later, she falls out of view. Hysterical; Alexia rushes over to the wall, eyes flowing with tears.
Cassie decides to leave it all behind. The cool rush of wind surrounds Cassie as she plummets toward her fate. Her eyes close for one last moment, thinking of all of those she will leave behind, those she loved, those she holds dear, setting her mind at ease. She spreads her arms outward feeling as if she were flying, flying away, far from here, in her final descent.
- by DanteDiLuca |
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- | Submitted on 08/11/2009 |
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- Title: Descent
- Artist: DanteDiLuca
- Description: A short bit from a story that I am currently writing. This particular part is about the end of a struggle between depression, drug addiction, and unrequited love; the main character Cassie, has struggled for weeks to maintain her composure, but alas, she can no longer.
- Date: 08/11/2009
- Tags: descent
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Comments (4 Comments)
- Holly1224 - 08/14/2009
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I think you are on to a good subject. Some of the writing is too dramatic. The story line is dramatic enough so try to use more unique words instead of "foresaken," "hour of need," "wings of an angel" and "love swelling." Try to come up with descriptors that haven't been used before and comparisons that are fresh. If this is about drug addiction and takes place in present day, use terminology from now and from addict terminology. - Report As Spam
- Vibrant Danie - 08/12/2009
- This story was really good. I would like to read about what happened before this, and what happened to Alexia after this.
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- DanteDiLuca - 08/11/2009
- =P Don't forget to comment people. o.o It'd be nice to hear your reactions as well as comments.
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