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It was already over an hour, when he tucked his stray piece of blonde hair away while scanning her favorite park with his wearily azure eyes. But there was no sign of her. Sighing softly, he couldn't stop the tears from falling. He knew he blew this big time.
She was the one. The light of his hope. She was different. She was kind, sweet and a touch of pure, everything he wanted. He knew his heart was captivated by her since they first met when they were both 4 years old.
Ever since high school, he was swarmed by countless of girls. He was every girl's dream; cute and irresistible charming, a great sense of humor and a soft poetic side too, top of the class and last but not least the school's ace basketball player. Just her, his one and only true friend, kept him from losing his sanity. But one day, he heard her defending herself from his crazy fan girls. He couldn't remember anything they said for the phrase "just friends" echoed in his ears. He laughed at his own stupidity, his hope, and gave up to giving in to the world of lies and sexes. He had changed; so much that he could hardly recognized the person in the mirror. No more good boy, hello to the bad boy. Everybody was shocked at his sudden change and he could see the pain in her tranquil sienna eyes. Hold on, her eyes were no longer in peace; they looked trouble which bothered him.
His older brother, the leader of Teenage Wolf, choked on his cold when he saw his sweet little brother flirting with the girls in the bar. Even though he might be a rebellious teenager, he would not allow his younger brother to become the same monster like him. He hunted up and down for the reason with the 360 degree changed but failed. At the end, he blamed on everybody, everything and himself, only the younger brother know the truth. But he blamed on hormones. Those raging hormones that drove him wild. And those sassy girls shamelessly showing themselves to him. Then once done with them, it was good bye and they will never be remember again. That was the world of lies and sexes.
Takeru Takaishi was so near to perfect, but everybody have their flaws. And his was the one great flaw that caused pain to people around him, especially the people he truly loved, to get hurt.
- by Sachie-Sama |
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- | Submitted on 09/06/2009 |
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- Title: Cheated... (part 2)
- Artist: Sachie-Sama
- Description: This one is on Takeru , after Hikari ran away. Kinda like a chapter two. Maybe I'll write Chapter 3 to finalise the two of them.. There are some mistake n error.. Hope u like it.. Pls review..
- Date: 09/06/2009
- Tags: cheat digimon romance hurt
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- HatredBearOmNomNom - 09/06/2009
- I'm going to be harsh so brace yourself. Your blond haired boy is a Mary Sue. That is to say he is too perfect, he lacks any substantial flaws that allow his character to develop. Also a 360 degree change would mean no change at all, I believe you meant 180 so I just assume it's a type-o. Really though I suggest rewriting the dominant character of this passage to make him more flawed. Being disfigured, disabled, or blind are easy physical flaws that you can use to spice up his character.
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