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I ran. The pressure was too much. My wounded hands didn't stop me. As a bullet hit my shoulder, I screamed. But i wasn't about to stop. There was pain everywhere. But as long as I escape, I will not stop. I met my stop. They were coming closer. "Heh." Too bad they can't catch me. I leaned back, and ran off the cliff. I was falling down, but i didn't care. My voice carried out. I screamed, hitting a rock on the bottom. I gasped. Blood was all over me. I felt dizzy and horrible. I released my wings which was covered in blood. I forgot to release. I winced in pain as I got up. My face was covered in blood. And of course, my blood. I had to get back to my kingdom. The enemies will be back. But I won't stop.
"Princess Ariana, you're back!" my maid said. She was rather happy. TO BE CONTINUED>
- by Starfruit_Love731 |
- Fiction
- | Submitted on 11/02/2009 |
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- Title: Escape
- Artist: Starfruit_Love731
- Description: Part 1 :)
- Date: 11/02/2009
- Tags: escape
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Comments (3 Comments)
- wolfyygurl - 01/29/2010
- YAYS! GREAT STORY!!! Can't wait for Part 2!
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- Starfruit_Love731 - 12/08/2009
- Well i tried to cut back on words since she's in pain. I tried to imagine her panting through words and her pain after falling.
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- Black Ski - 11/08/2009
- Pretty good start but, you had so many small sentences. So, try to make them longer, it almost sounds like a poem. 4/5 smile
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