Haiku

• Artist: Kiminity21
• Description: to the layman, a haiku is simply a three line poem with the 5-7-5 syllable structure. A traditional haiku tends to include a naure word that tells the eader what season the haiku is about. In order to write a nature haiku. It is best to be more thorough in your writing.
  I did this. Yes in Creative Writing class.
• Date: 01/18/2009
• Tags: haiku

5. a clear blue sunny day
7. i can see color rock boulders
5. breeze running though my hair

5. cool sneaks hanging from trees
7. i saw leaves that fall from trees
5. Gym classes were out

5. Many cars were parked
7. i heard a furnace going
5. cars driving on street


what do you think. I thought these were weird. what you have to do is have every syllable like 5 7 and 5 like that.

Comments

[Jadorade]

A haiku has a syllable count of 5-7-5-7-7 with five lines (obviously). That's a traditional haiku. What you have is something else, what that is I'm not very sure. It's not bad, in fact it is pretty good, but it isn't a haiku. Good job though! =]