Uncle Clayton's Backyard

• Artist: Seto Arisu
• Description: I had to write this for creative writing. The main idea was SENSORY images, so you should be able to picture it in your head, especially if you relate to it.
  
  Tell me your favorite line, and what I should improve on. :)
  
  For the fragmented sentences- They are purposely put there. PLEASE! I DON'T WANT GRAMMAR HELP!
• Date: 09/22/2010
• Tags: uncle claytons backyard sensory flowers

Uncle Clayton's backyard. His backyard is filled with so many magical things. From sticky honey bees to delicate bloodsoaked roses, grass so green that you thought it was a new shade of green. There were blooming cherry trees with juicy, plump cherries, towering maple trees as far as the eye could see. A rickety, mud plastered path leading to a densely populated garden, swarming with aged lady bugs, rainbows of young butterflies; and so many ants you'd think they were taking over the world. His garden is a mystical place. Uncle Clayton's backyard.

Comments

[The Garden of Eatin]

I felt like i was there XD 5-5

[Your Best Judgement]

I like the "so many ants . . ." creative. smile 5/5 i imagined giant ants in the back yard and friggin mothra's filled with rainbows and angry lady bugs. I dunnose.. xD