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i walk through the dark mist thinking to myself " where am i? what am i doing here?" i had no idea where i was. i wanted to yell help but i new no one was going to hear me because i ran away from my home and my village. i can't go back, even if i wanted to, no one wants me there anymore. no one cares for me there. i thought if i ran away and found a new village i could start a new beginning for myself but now, im lost, i cant find my way out. i try to find food and shelter but all i can find is the ground and the foggy cold mist. i thought i could've survive by myself and travel alone. i new i had to take someone with me but i didnt listen to myself, i thought wrong.
days pass by and im dying from hunger and lonleyness. i said to myself " i dont wanna die alone.. " i new i was going to die alone in the dark. i new it from the beginning, ever since i was born. when i was born, my mother died and my father was crying. when i got to kindregarden i asked my dad a question " wheres mommY?" he answered "shes up there now watching over us" i ask again " what happened to her" he got angry at me and started to cry like he did when she died. "she died because of you! i hate you! i never wanted you! i hated you ever since you were born and after she died!" he yelled crying at me. i look down at my feet and started to cry too. i ran outside. and thats how i got here. now im alone.
a week passes by and im dead.
someone out hunting found me but he was to late to save me. he buried me. but before that he found a tear sliding down from my cheek. he said "rest in peace!" he buried me.
the tomestone said "little girl died in the forest from hunger and lonleyness."
- by Divine_Blossom |
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- | Submitted on 12/23/2008 |
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- Title: little girl found dead
- Artist: Divine_Blossom
- Description: this girl died of hunger and lonleyness. she was a lonley girl who ran away from her home and her village. she thought she could find another village so she could start a new beginning for herself
- Date: 12/23/2008
- Tags: little girl found dead
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Comments (7 Comments)
- Tetsudai - 03/17/2009
- Have you met my friend English Language? He'd got a few questions for you, something about a rape.
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- icefox5 - 03/17/2009
- good..nice....(grammer is..okay...-.-)
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- Hikaru1214 - 03/13/2009
- good...-_-
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- princes mia - 03/07/2009
- aww baby poor girl hideous father T.T
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- filipinoinlove123 - 01/26/2009
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Very awesome!
But just the grammer you have to improve on
Okay!
<3
Vote on mine please!
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- Doug-callme - 01/26/2009
- I dont know why some people didnt like it. its very good
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- -x- Fridge -x- - 01/26/2009
- I like the ideas and the plot, however, I agree with Xanopticon. I almost had to stop reading this due to the awkward format, cluttered text and the improper grammar. I advise reformatting it, and cleaning up the language and reposting it. I like it, but all the errors and awkwardness really subtracted from my enjoyment. 3/5
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