death by school

• Artist: Kishin_Mistress
• Description: this is about a girl who hates school so muchsshe sees things
• Date: 12/29/2008
• Tags: poetry insanity

a girl named onix tadikichi sits down at the kitchen,her life passes before her eyes as she inhaled the darkness,the walls closed in on her as she rushed to the stairs to her room,the stairs seemed to be going further every time she took a step! she crashes into the couch as she gets dizzy,and she asks herself "why me?" as her mom tells her shes going to school this year....

Comments

[AbbyG232]

I can see what it is and means. Good Job!!!

[Madame Missy]

This isn't exactly a poem... You also put it in the wrong place. Nice try...

[HHH4ever96]

ummm..... you put the poem in the wrong place, amd it doesn't exactly look like a poem, but it is pretty good 3/5

[Cottoncandyocbra3]

Rather bland and not really poetic. 1/5.

[cloverump]

Not very well written , but descriptive in some places(GOOD!!). Rewrite it , use different words in boring bland places <end> ... Good job , sorta.

[ii_Rainb0w_R a w r r_ii]

lolz