would you

• Artist: shadow warrior222
• Description: its just a short peom i wrote its really short but then again so are all mine
• Date: 07/15/2008
• Tags: shadowwarrior222peomwouldyou

if i said i had a gun and i was gunna kill myself
would you come and convince me to lay the gun on the shelf
or would you let me travel to the reapers land
only to embrace the devils hand

if i said i had a noose around my neck
would you save me and show me iam worth the effort to protect
or would you leave me
and let me drown in my own agony

if i put some poisen to my lips
would you stop me before i took a sip
or would you let me die
and if i did would you shed a tear would u cry?

Comments

[Tyleroxasora]

i like it, very nice 4/5

[wordswithoutmercy]

Hmmm, good concept. Horrible writing style. You should capitalize more, and instead of using "u" write the actual word, okay? I'm not trying to be mean, I just wanna help, okay? But all in all I give it a 3/5.