You're Lying Again

• Artist: Twelve Yb TnuoC
• Description: This is a poem written specifically for my profile. :3 See, I write a LOT of poems, since they are easy and natural for me, and I don't have to be too horribly dedicated to come up with a good poem. (I have issues with dedication. >>;)
  
  I wrote this on the inspiration of one of my favorite characters (keh, guess which one? xD;). And yes, it is awesome. And you can't convince me any differently, though, as long as you're here, a rate, or some constructive critic, would be more than welcome. <3
• Date: 07/16/2008
• Tags: youre lying again hide broken

You're Lying Again--

Something worth the words you're fed
Something worth the tears you've shed
A distance carved of fears and stone
A distance to believe you're all alone

You're lying again, a practice tried and true
An intricate act, meant to protect you
You've sealed the windows, bolted the doors
To hide inside that broken heart of yours

You think that you're a magic man
A miracle worker, the leader of the clan
You've come to know yourself as high above
Those few people you claim to love

You're lying again, a practice tried and true
An intricate act, meant to protect you
You've sealed the windows, bolted the doors
To hide inside that broken heart of yours

Why follow after a light so black?
An ideal that strengthens the things you lack?
To abandon even your closest friends
A false truth blocking out the help they'd lend

You're lying again, a practice tried and true
An intricate act, meant to protect you
You've sealed the windows, bolted the doors
To hide inside that broken heart of yours

A sweet little smile, to say you're fine
A shadow of yourself gives words to bind
That ideal of emptiness and paradox
Add more weight to heavy chains and locks

You're lying again, a practice tried and true
An intricate act, meant to protect you
You've sealed the windows, bolted the doors
To hide inside that broken heart of yours

Comments

[Fries And A Milkshake]

god...you are so concieted and full of yourself, i am gonna give you a low score JUST for having a HUUUGE ego and telling everyone how awesome you are at writing, yeah the poem was cool but you....ARENT

[JayTee Eni]

so in everything you've written here you talk about how good you are and how you've never been bad at writing, conceited much?
really its not that good
it could've been shorter most of the lines were just repeats and i understand that repetition is an element of poetry but you over did it, kind of like reading the same poem twice

[Twelve Yb TnuoC]

^^ Thanks guys~ Yeah, I usually put a lot of effort into my writing. >>; Which turns into lots of writing, which turns into lots of practice, which is the universal cure for being bad at /anything/ 8D;; Which I never was, SO. Erm, but, yes. :3 I appreciate the comments, and good luck with that uncooperative brain, Craig.

[Starguy32]

Wow, that's actually REALLY good, and yet, it seems oddly familiar, not like I've heard it before type of familiar, just it seems to remind me of things that I don't remember having previous knowledge of.
... Yes, my brain does this to me at times, and yet, I still let it sit in my head feeding on the useless information that i attain in school, hmm... oh well. lol biggrin
Really good. 5/5

[lil-tomboi44]

realli nice poem...love ur choice of words...realli realli descriptive and metaphoric...(^_^)...