-
Plauged Rabbit
as i sit and ponder
to where the stars wander
i realize that I'd like a carrot
i think of ancient greece ad how all things cease
you have the epaulette now wear it
and it saddens me
this dark world i see
in many ways lacking merrit
and though it sounds vague
my death's in this plauge
and I really would like a carrot
Amor
My loving one
I take you in my arms
I kiss you gently
I brush your hair back behind your ears
even in silence
I hear your soft angelic soprano
when my eyes shut
the only thing i can see is you
oh, how beautiful
those lips, rained on by moonlight
as our eyes meet
love becomes so much more than a word
- by SilvertongueSagittarius |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 07/20/2008 |
- Skip
- Title: plauged rabbit & Amor
- Artist: SilvertongueSagittarius
- Description: this is from my book, Amor Inter Lepos, which means "love between rabbits." these are two poems that i enjoyed the most from it. the first is a rhymed aabccbddbeeb format and the second is in a 3word,6word,4word,8word format
- Date: 07/20/2008
- Tags: rabbits love poetry fantasy
- Report Post
Comments (2 Comments)
- SilvertongueSagittarius - 07/23/2008
- fair enough. yes, the bottom one does leave a little to want but it's rather difficult in that stlye. most of my poems are written because some1 says "hey, bet you cant write bout..." in this case, it was rabbits. so i went a step up and im almost done with the all rabbit poetry book. Amor was mainly just a sappy love poem but i liked the format a lot so i posted it.
- Report As Spam
- Atheshya - 07/22/2008
-
xD I laughed a little at the first one. However, the rhyming in it does seem pretty forced... but still, I might have given it a good rating for the humor alone. Unfortunately, the second one doesn't stand as well with me. While nothing about it is forced, it's not interesting. At all. It brings nothing new to the table.
Since the first poem would have gotten four stars, and the second would have gotten two, I'll have to take the medium of three. - Report As Spam