Hearts Break,, I Know

• Artist: nelliface
• Description: This is a poem I wrote a few years back whilst I was in a physics test lol I'd like some comments and tell me what you think.
  Thanks Lx x x x
• Date: 11/18/2008
• Tags: heartsbreak

Hearts break
I know
You were fake
And you were low
On our four-poster bed
In my own blood
You left me for dead
In a flowing red flood
If only you looked behind
As the tears rolled down my face
You would have released that you were blind
But instead you left without a single trace

Comments

[Soft Kitnz]

I thought it was really desciptive and visual.

[musicbyme]

i like it.i giv it a 3.keep on writing and u'll get better

[lil bunny fru fru]

You had misspelled 'realized'.

Other than that it's not too bad.