neverending love lullaby

• Artist: Xx_twilight_cullen_xX
• Description: this lullaby is so sweet.the first time i heard i knew where he got it from....
• Date: 11/28/2008
• Tags: lullaby

heart life was like a moonless light,
shrouded in the stars,
beauty can be such a fright,
but now you're in my arms.

heart you are my life now,
can't you see?
I'd cross oceans,
I'd swim seas,
to be with you,
that's enough for me.

heart your face is like a poison,
intoxicating me,
how can we live forever?
when our love can never be?

Comments

[amandapanda33]

i liked it! It seemed like it had meaning to anyone who has a true love!

[Naruto3672]

its nice it sounds like you love someone but who is it

[Golden Sarah-Belle]

there are a few spots you need to work on. in the 2nd stanza, you need to change one of the 4th or 5th lines. it just copies itself. and in the last stanza, the metaphor of the face like poison doesnt work. intoxicating doesnt fit with poison, even though it sounds like it. its a pretty good poem though. i like it biggrin