Revenge

• Artist: Flora-Terran
• Description: About a ghost
• Date: 08/07/2009
• Tags: revenge ghost

All through the night i cried Even though you were by my side.
You rubbed my back and wiped my eyes
Siting up with fear I see it again and again
As he falls to the ground making no sound
Me on my knees the gun in my hand
How could it be that you are here i shot you die out of fear
But there you lay smiling at me looking a alive as can be
Taking me close you whispered in my ear
Your time will come and i will be there.

Comments

[Kibroth]

Not bad work.
Remember to check for grammar and spelling errors!

I also suggest spacing out the lines a bit more.
Try to find a rythm and work with it! Experiment with different words.

You have potential, you just have to develope your talent.

-K