Demons

• Artist: The Xandalorian
• Description: A poem written to explain my constant sleep paralysis >_<
• Date: 08/28/2012
• Tags: demons

I lie in bed - strangled - looking to the sky awaiting letup
Pushing my hardest to move around, paralyzed and can't get up
I wonder what's going on, and why I feel an aura
All sounds are distorted; I shut my eyes in horror

I take a peek again, desperate to know what's going on
Fighting to let out a scream only to realize my voice is gone
In the corner I see a figure - either in all black or dark cloud
If I was scared before, I'm beyond terrified now

Time passes, maybe minutes to an hour
I finally can move again; I've regained physical power
What is the cause of this, and why occurring so often?
Maybe life's catching up with me to rush me into my coffin.

Comments

[The Xandalorian]

orrrr you don't know how to rhyme them... in that sense... play with the words instead of reading traditionally

[xXKayleaXx]

Cloud and now don't rhyme at all which sort of throws of the rhythem. Otherwise I really enjoy it smile

[Spellzmage]

Very good 5/5

[The Xandalorian]

I feel as if it could've been a little better also >_<' razz thanks for that feedback biggrin

[wora3000]

Not bad, but the last stanza seems a little off compared to rest....it just doesn't have the same grammatical conventions.