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A long time ago, 3 heretics were inborn the Throne to Hell. The first demon was named Satan, the second monster was named Devil, the last and youngest was Diablo. These demons were the kings of Hell, but there was dispute between them, who was stronger? Diablo did not care much for power, just a family among the humans. Human affairs were forbidden to demons, so Diablo’s dreams were but lost. One day in Mexico, Diablo was gathering food to feed his minions. He walked with his human form, hiding all evil secrets. Walking back he saw a woman being attacked by a vampire, the sons of Satan. Diablo immediately threw his claws into the demons heart stating, “Feed in hell”, and then he sliced his head from his shoulders. The woman knew he was a demon…a monster. That didn’t stop her from giving him a kiss. Diablo couldn’t restrain himself from the Oath of Humanity, later he took her for his wife. He remembered his cold hearted son he left at hell, he knew the danger he was putting her in. When he tried to tell her to leave him, she told him she bares his son. That son was me…
My Father and mother were killed when I was 6, my father told me that I was the inheritor to be the God of Fire and that I was to avenge my mother. Before he died I took a strip of my father’s wings, as a charm. I took a vow to slay the demons that murdered my family. When I was young I was informed that in order to take the Throne of Hell, I needed to kill Satan, Devil, there offspring, and my brother. I knew I had to find a trainer that would help me learn the arts in Demon Slaying. So I waited till I found the greatest fighter in the world…My Sensei, Haiti.
I waited 12 years for him to teach me the ways of D.S. which was one of the strongest arts ever made. At first Haiti thought I was just a kid carrying dead skin around my neck, so he took me in his home. There I meet a strange kid my age with glasses. His name was Tec, guess he’s Haiti’s son.
Tomorrow I start training, and I will tell you…my adventure begins...
- by Diaz Slayer |
- Fiction
- | Submitted on 06/03/2009 |
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Comments (6 Comments)
- LexOnFyr - 06/14/2009
- It was okay and I was in to the story, but you have puncuation problems. There were question marks in places that they weren't supposed to be in and, occasionally, there were exclaimation points in wrong places. Commas are used incorrectly. Everything else is okay. It's a very good idea to write about. Oh, and it went by a little fast. You should work on that, too. 3/5 (By the way, I read it all up until where the narrator... uh... well... closes his eyes, I guess
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- OneXMuerte - 06/12/2009
- You need MORE help in writing. You are not a good writer. The ones who commented know nothing of writing.
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- Yuliana Evelien Ray - 06/12/2009
- Ok I read the rest of it and I still give it a 5/5 you're a very good writer. I hope you right more because I can't wait till you do XD
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- Yuliana Evelien Ray - 06/12/2009
- I like it. I give it a 5/5 because you kept everything together and made everything fit.
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- DoubIe Entendre - 06/03/2009
- Its pretty good, I just hope people don't get confused with the three heretic's names, you know, thinking they are all the same, even though they are not.
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- Diaz Slayer - 06/03/2009
- Next Chapter Will Be Posted Tomorrow~ Please Enjoy
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