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Short poem for the sake of getting a new one up Meh, it's been a while since I posted an entry so I'm just going to throw this short poem out. I'm currently working on a poem though, which I suppose I'll share here first so to get other people's opinions before I go ahead and give it to my brother Felix, who it's for. But for now, enjoy this. I think I'll call it "Lol, internet". smile Lol Internet These words on a screen They don't mean a thing And yet my stomach is knotting And yet my blood is boiling These words on my monitor Just words, nothing more And yet my cheeks are soaked And yet my fear is provoked This text you have typed These words I can see From your heart to your fingers They shouldn't phase me And yet... --And yet... ----And yet... I'm broken. EDIT:: I feel like responding to a question posed. Quote: Is the title meant to be ironic? Or just random? Yes, sorta, kinda. It really doesn't have a title, but I felt that "Lol Internet" (which is something a lot of friends keep saying) sums up how I was trying to deal with it. What someone had said hurt, but I was trying to tell myself that it didn't really matter cause it was online, but it still hurt. PS: Remember kids, there's other poems far more entertaining to read.

Posted by: Rass Fri Apr 07, 2006 @ 07:40am

[b:723929a83e]A First On TV

This is the twentieth century,
you are there, preparing to skin
a human being alive. Your part
will be to remain calm.[/color:723929a83e][/b:723929a83e]

-David Ignatow[/color:723929a83e][/align:723929a83e]

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Silver Kiss~121
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Commented on: Sun Apr 09, 2006 @ 04:23am


	Hm, I'm not sure if I Have already commented in your journal, But I really like the poems you make, Its really interesting to see them. I actually have your journal on my Subcribed list. o.O How odd.

Commented on: Mon Apr 10, 2006 @ 12:19pm


	LOVE IT!

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Commented on: Wed Apr 12, 2006 @ 03:06am


	Good poem. It's very deep and touching. Even for a short/quick poem its good work!

Commented on: Wed Apr 12, 2006 @ 07:02am


	I like it, a lot. My first impression was of sadness, fear and anger, from the last lines of the first 3 paragraphs. So if thats what you were trying to express, well done. biggrin heart I'm a little confused about the I'm broken bit. I personally would not have said, "And yet," repeadidivley. I would have gone into details. But its your poem, not mine. whee I love it, so I'm going to look at more. surprised

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Commented on: Wed Apr 12, 2006 @ 12:07pm


	Is the title meant to be ironic? Or just random? Either way, I like how you convey your emotions even though as you pointed out, words in a screen shouldn't have meaning at all.

Commented on: Thu Apr 13, 2006 @ 08:38am


	its great blaugh , makes you think...... sweatdrop

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Commented on: Sun Apr 16, 2006 @ 07:38am


	it's really good, needs a bit more improvement, but who am i to say anything, i suck at poems.

Commented on: Tue Apr 18, 2006 @ 07:57pm


	I really like this poem - mainly because i can relate to it.. even though words are on a computer monter doesnt mean thewy cant make you feel .. Nice work .. I wish i could write D:

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Commented on: Thu Apr 20, 2006 @ 03:41am


	thats really good ^^ 3nodding

Commented on: Thu May 04, 2006 @ 06:28am


	Lol Edited. ^_^' (Still like it, though)

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Commented on: Fri May 05, 2006 @ 03:58am


	So true gonk sweatdrop

Commented on: Wed May 10, 2006 @ 06:39am


	Wow, I really like it! That feeling is so familiar to me too. I didn't expect something so good out of a poem named "Lol Internet". The title makes it ironic. It's cool.

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Commented on: Thu Jun 29, 2006 @ 09:49pm


	wow...that is really good...I mean, it's so...deep if I would choose a word to describe it.

Commented on: Thu Jun 29, 2006 @ 09:50pm


	This is very good. It all flows, and it keeps your attention. I liked how you repeated "and yet" three times, it kept it going. I am going to continue reading more, because this is really good. 4laugh

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Commented on: Sun Nov 19, 2006 @ 07:32am


	I really like that one, I usually never ever comment your journal.... but this one reminded me of something that happened earlier today. <3

Commented on: Sun Nov 19, 2006 @ 10:51pm


	Hmm... I've never been able to convince myself that just because something happens over the internet and people can't see my face, that it doesn't matter.

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Commented on: Mon Feb 19, 2007 @ 06:58pm


	surprised heart

Commented on: Mon Mar 19, 2007 @ 07:30pm


	Poem is so true... ;.;

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Commented on: Sun Apr 08, 2007 @ 08:39pm


	you are a very talented poet xd

Commented on: Sat Apr 14, 2007 @ 12:19am


	D: heart

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Commented on: Sun Apr 29, 2007 @ 04:00am


	I love it. It's just...wow. It reminded me of something... And now I'm sorta tearing up... Damn boys and their hurtful words...

Commented on: Sat Jun 30, 2007 @ 12:48am


	i like it. its deep and its about something so commonplace. 3nodding

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