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********..... domokun ......


I just realized, as I was writing another poem earlier today that when I erased that journal entry with all the ranting and raving about my one in a million person, I erased a poem that was in it about them that I really wanted to save. Luckilly my stupid brain kinda committed it to memory, at least the beginning and the end of it, because I liked it so much, but the middle, which I will admit was forgetable, was lost, but I think I'd very much like to restate the beginning and the end of that poem, just because it was pretty mature, even if mature only means slightly provocative. It was partially the reason why I erased the entry in the first place, the whole thing is basicly a rant on physical lust, but I still consider it an achievement, and acceptable. So here it goes. Here is the beginning two lines. The icing on my cake....that flavor I crave......the taste on my tongue....that savor I save. Then of course the rest was more about my passion for that person. Then I ended with this. I'm a dog, deep inside.....my fate sad but true.....but when I stand on the brink.....I admire the view. blaugh . I don't know, it's better with the middle filled in, I'll work on it, but that's for another day. As I said I was busy writing again this morning. Another poem for my love. This one's a little cliche, if not a completely stolen concept, but it's entirely mine, and I'm proud of it. And I will even line it up, with the breaks represented as each new line. Because I really, really like this one. I'm telling you. I worked on this one, and I'm really getting a lot of good inspiration lately, so there may be more to come. Ok, here goes.

My love for you is like a wave
and it carries me headlong toward you
and I am like a ship, lost to the merciless powers of the mighty sea.

I am at it's whim.
I am powerless.
I am pulled to you
drawn to you through space and time.

I can not abort it's grip.

and your love

Your love is like an island
with barely enough room for the two of us
but we make do
and I grow to like it.

Soon I realize, all I can see is you.
You are all that remains of the civilization I once knew
the only thing that matters now.

Soon I give up searching for something better
because, once again, I am content.

Do you think I would stay if I wasn't?

I would sooner drown myself in the abyss than waste my life tilling barren ground.

Your radiance blooms before me every day.
And I do believe I have found paradise.
How lucky I am to be shipwrecked on your isle

I see that it is much better than I could have first imagined.

I see the sun in your smile
the earth in your eyes
the breeze I can hear when you speak

and when I look close enough
when I just stop to admire you
I see the flower pedal of your cheek
and I know that my love has brought me home.

What do you think? Like I said, just the critic in me talking, but it does seem a little borrowed, and I could have tried harder to make it mine, but I do like it. It's kind of like a pseudo poem to my love. Like, it was half what I wanted to say to them, and then it was half just classic bullshit that everyone likes to read. Like, that part about the earth in your eyes, I almost wanted to put rain in your eyes, because it created more of a visual affect, but I realized it didn't really apply. They have brown eyes. cool . Brown eyes which I love. biggrin . So I had to do an edit on the first draft. But that part about drowning myself in the abyss, complete bull. Just generic filler that's supposed to add sencerity or something. Whatever, I BS greating cards too. But the rest is 100% me. 4laugh . It came from up here, idea , and in here heart , and I meant, well, I meant the general meaning of it. Even though my love is sometimes maniacal and I don't feel like I could ever say no to them, I uhhhh, can't picture myself putting up much of a fight to leave. I like it here. Lol. heart heart heart heart heart heart

ok heart-a-palooza is over now, thank you and goodnight.